Tonight i want more
Something more than fervor
Do you really love me underneath all the insatiable sex
Your breath feels like a ghost’s whisper
As we dig deeper and deeper
I thought you were my prince charming, sent to save me
Constantly charming and seductive with your slippery tongue
Coming into my life just when i needed you
Showering me with attention,pearls and diamonds
But always going back to her
Telling me you will leave her when the right time comes
Telling me that she is nothing compared to me
My heart shrieks with pain at the thought of you with her
Do you lay your hands on her the way you do me
Do you nibble on her fingers the way you do mine
Do you gulp from her open veins of love the way you drain mine
I guess i got exactly what i asked for
What i wanted so dreadfully
But tonight i want something more
Tonight i don’t want just pleasure because it leaves me bare
I won’t settle for just the thrill
So this is my notice to you
Because i will be your substitute lover no more
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Darling, you deserve better.
This is beautiful, as always. Thank you x
Thank you.. lol, but fortunately its not me, its a dear friend of mine.. 🙂
hmmm…. nice! 🙂
well appreciated.. 🙂
Love that is not true is no love at all, touch that is not sincere is like plain air running through your skin. You know it’s there, but you don’t feel it, real love is love you can feel and your partner would never let you doubt for a second.
very true, but some people choose to stay in relationships which are one sided, always giving love but never really receiving any.. thanx for coming by.. 😀
I don’t know Abby…. the passion, the allure but alas no true love. Well phrased!!!!
Thank you Mike, sometimes as women we believe the man will leave their wives for them which almost never happens at all, we are so sure to hope that in the end we really only have ourselves to blame for being heart broken..thanx for your lovely comment.. 🙂
Excellent job Aby! loved it… blesing 🙂
Thank you!! 😀 *blessings* right back at you
wow! this is incredibly moving! Thank you for posting I love it. I hope your friend is ok
Thank you so much.. :-).. and i hope she will be ok as well..
it is sooooooooo beautiful and moving, although also sooooooo sad and true, your friend deserve better
thank you.. im very glad you enjoyed it..:-).. every woman deserves way better than this..
Well done. I love the vulnerability in your poems. :0)
Thank you, i try to let all my emotions out when i write.. 🙂
Very nice abichica! You do write with a great deal of emotion.
Thank you.. i appreciate your lovely comment.. 🙂
My wife has but one competitor for my love…the computer that sits upon my desk which fortunately has never given me an ultimatum. 🙂
lol..:-D.. i’m sure every woman does.. but as long as you don’t sleep with your computer and lie to her because you are sleeping with it i think its ok.. 😀
You have telepathy. I am trying to kick my gf having bad boy to the curb RIGHT NOW!!! He’s not as charming as the douchebag in your poem, but the sex is mind blowing and has been hard to give up………….WELL WRITTEN!!!!!
lol.. yeah i know, its probably hard for her with the “mind blowing sex”..:-D..that can be a lot distracting.. :-D.. but i hope she clears her mind long enough to get rid of him.. 🙂
Another great post! Thank you!
Thank YOU for coming by.. 😀
I thought you may find this blog entry interesting: http://leloveimage.blogspot.com/2011/08/what-we-are-doing-is-real.html 🙂 … somehow similar, somehow opposite to your poem. 🙂
oh, a nice choice of new template, btw. 🙂 … your house looks quite cleaner lol
lol.. thank you, i though i needed a change, and i checked out the blog you showed me, very nice, i do like it.. :-D.. you know me well.. 🙂
Never be anyone’s substitute anything. First choice or bust, lady. 😉
yup.. that’s the best one.. :-).. thanx for stopping by..
The pains of this relationship are bittersweet! You caught it all … not easy … wishing your friend well! Everyone deserves to be “first fiddle”!
very true, i like the way you put it ” every one deserves to be first fiddle” :-D.. thanx for stopping by.. 🙂
“A man who marries his mistress has a fool for a wife”
-A French saying that I can recall hearing as a child; It means even if he marries you, you lose
lol.. yeah i think its true, no man ever leaves his wife to marry his mistress.. :-).. thanx for coming by..:-D
This is a very well crafted poem. It just flows seamlessly and so smoothly. It has a beautiful rhythm and is continually musical. (This poem definitely is one to read out loud.)
It is important to write from other people’s viewpoints. The trick, when doing this, is for it to be convincing and natural. Clearly, this is both. One would never know that this speaker’s experience is not your own. Very well done!
Thank you so much for your great advice and lovely comment.. i appreciate it a lot.. 🙂
beautifully crafted feelings of an insatiable mind…nice lines!
thank you so much.. 😀
Beautiful words and you set them down with care. Goodness, that is thought-provoking charm and I think you have a signature style. From what Ir ead. Kudos, and thanks for the comment
wooww.. thank you so much.. i appreciate your kind words.. and i have got that from a lot of comments, that i have a signature style, so i guess i should be happy for that.. 😀
MAN IS WHAT MAN DOES…
strongly written…
Thank you so much.. i appreciate that..:-)
Wow! I just kept thinking about myself as I read this…everything I wanted to say to him and all the emotions that I felt, all of it in that poem. Thank You on writing such an amazing poem.
Thank you so much, i’m so glad you could relate to my poem..:-)
It’s always painful to think that there’s someone else there doing what we do with the person we love 😦 beaut!! xx
i know right!! its the worst feeling anyone could ever get..thanx for coming by.. 😀
Very powerful!!! I truly enjoyed the imagery!
i am so glad you truly enjoyed it.. 😀
Very emotive work Nice!
thank you so much.., im glad you enjoy it.. 🙂
This is one of the two reasons I blew off the bad boy whose sex I now miss…Your poems are always so spot on for me.
lol..yeah, sometimes even good sex is not enough to make you stay in a loveless or bad relationship.. 😀
if this is for real, you deserve someone better! 🙂 you’re a great writer. you pour out your emotions. i love that about you… 🙂
aaww. thank you so much.. that means so much to me.. 😀
O wow….this is so beautiful and strong.
Thank you so very much.. 🙂
ouch, that hurts 😀 but u have some amaaaazing pictures here,Do you lay your hands on her the way you do me
Do you nibble on her fingers the way you do mine
Do you gulp from her open veins of love the way you drain mine
woooooooow really
I love that you are so taken by my words!! 😀
soooooooo taken into a state of trance 😀 girl u can be the next Armin van Buuren for God’s sake 😀
wooww!! you flatter me dear sir.. 😀 but thank you
uw 😀 the least i can say 😀
🙂